GrandVizierOlaf
commented
1 year ago Page 25
Yah -> Yeah
-"Yah, sure."
+"Yeah, sure."Open GrandVizierOlaf opened 1 year ago
GrandVizierOlaf
commented
1 year ago Yah -> Yeah
-"Yah, sure."
+"Yeah, sure."Awkward sentence.
-To the right of the diagram was a cut list and for measurements.
+To the right of the diagram was a cut list <???> measurements.fire -> wire (though fire does sound awesome here)
-spool of fire
+spool of wireipped -> flipped
-hand-hold flap ipped out
+hand-hold flap flipped outnoticed -> notice
-Chris couldn't help but noticed
+Chris couldn't help but noticeblood crusted -> blood-crusted
-their blood crusted mouths
+their blood-crusted mouthsscrapping -> scraping
-heard the scrapping of the tool
+heard the scraping of the toolfrom -> front
-well back from the from and back
+well back from the front and backallies -> alleys
-or the back allies and parking lots
+or the back alleys and parking lotsInconsistent punctuation
-smell of smoke—faint for the past few hours, was strong
+smell of smoke—faint for the past few hours—was strongRemove extra the
-and he centered the lowered the hammer
+and he centered the lowered hammerInconsistent punctuation
-The two of them—the one near the sinks to his left, and the one near the stove, to his right, were equally far away.
+The two of them—the one near the sinks to his left, and the one near the stove, to his right—were equally far away.graval -> gravel
-the graval of the roof.
+the gravel of the roof.starting -> staring
-David was starting at him
+David was staring at himseparation -> separated
-low half-wall that separation the kitchen from
+low half-wall that separated the kitchen fromMissing it
-dead woman pawing at reminded
+dead woman pawing at it remindedhe -> be
-he'd he dead
+he'd be deadwas -> were (subjunctive)
-and yet the neighborhood around them was lit as if it was almost evening.
+and yet the neighborhood around them was lit as if it were almost evening.bad -> had
-his door bad been bashed in
+his door had been bashed inbe -> he
-coffee grinder be was abusing
+coffee grinder he was abusingPunctuation outside of quotes
-"I got the sandpaper".
+"I got the sandpaper."Punctuation outside of quotes
-"—you're the guy with the notebook".
+"—you're the guy with the notebook."repeat -> repeated
-He slid the bar up and repeat the process.
+He slid the bar up and repeated the process.further -> farther
-kicked the crowbar in further
+kicked the crowbar in fartherPrevious problem actually repeats a few times throughout the book where further is used to describe a physical distance rather than farther. Doing a search for the former shows pages 35, 67, two instances on 93, and 97.
GrandVizierOlaf
commented
1 year ago Awkward sentence with no punctuation
-David looked across the suite and couldn't see the Chris or his door from here
+David looked across the suite and couldn't see Chris or his door from here.this -> his
-David lifted this fire extinguisher uncertainly.
+David lifted his fire extinguisher uncertainly.adrenalin -> adrenaline
-Propelled by adrenalin and fear David grabbed
+Propelled by adrenaline and fear David grabbedOk, all finished.
vtdawson
commented
1 year ago Page 40
"I—I'm not sure that Chris and Stacy and handle the ladder by themselves."
*can handle
P.S. Great job by GrandVisierOlaf!
Pages are based on the kindle edition as the appear on my phone. I think these are relative to each device so I've tried to include context for finding the errors, but can provide clarification if needed.
I'm still reading so I will add comments to this issue if I find more.
Page 1
Missing the word
withPage 11
hard->hadPage 17
Missing an Oxford comma when it is used elsewhere.