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Applying open organization principles to save factory energy #148

Closed semioticrobotic closed 1 year ago

semioticrobotic commented 2 years ago

The problem with energy costs is that most people don't think about them. They just look at their overall bill without considering how the energy was used. By monitoring and measuring energy use through sensors in very specific locations, energy waste can be made transparent and reduced.

That's the premise of the book Reinventing Fire: Bold Business Solutions for the New Energy Era, which offers methods to eliminate the use of fossil fuels by 2050 through energy waste reduction. It's also the premise of a story I began in an earlier article about two retired utilities salespeople-turned-consultants who started an open organization community to reduce energy waste in their region, which they call the "Reinventing Fire Community." Their work depends on the open organization principles of Community, Transparency, Collaboration, Inclusivity, and Adaptability.

AmyJuneH commented 2 years ago

moved into copy editing on the OSDC side

AmyJuneH commented 2 years ago

Applying open organization principles to save factory energy is ready for review. I also emailed so the edit discussion can happen over there.

Preview link https://opensource.com/preview-link/node/70183/82c61027-a37e-4ad3-894f-ae0d79698ab4

RonMcFarland commented 2 years ago

Here are some change recommendations in this article. 1.  In the sentence, "This is where transparency and collaboration between all plant processes are essential."  In think "people in" is required between "between" and "all".2.  In the sentence, "In this hypothetical case study, the factory energy consultant goes to factories, starting with their previous electricity users. They offer suggestions on how to reduce yearly energy expenses by at least 10-50%."....I think "their" should be "his".  Also, "They offer" should be "He offers".....3.  In the sentence, "First, the factory energy consultant makes an appointment with their most trusted electricity-using manufacturing company and explains that they can help the company save money, with a target of saving 27% of primary energy by 2050 while maintaining current production levels."....I think "their" should be "his" and "they" should be "he".4.  Where "[A more detailed explanation here would help readers connect the chart to the point here.]" is written, add this sentence...."Notice that most energy is lost right in the power station where the electricity is generated.  Then, there is loss in getting the electricity to the location, to operate the motor, to run the drivetrain, pump and values and finally, the fluid going through the pipes.  All those losses should be looked at."

RonMcFarland commented 2 years ago

AmyJune,

Here are some change recommendations in this article.

  1. In the sentence, "This is where transparency and collaboration between all plant processes are essential." In think "people in" is required between "between" and "all".
  2. In the sentence, "In this hypothetical case study, the factory energy consultant goes to factories, starting with their previous electricity users. They offer suggestions on how to reduce yearly energy expenses by at least 10-50%."....I think "their" should be "his". Also, "They offer" should be "He offers".....
  3. In the sentence, "First, the factory energy consultant makes an appointment with their most trusted electricity-using manufacturing company and explains that they can help the company save money, with a target of saving 27% of primary energy by 2050 while maintaining current production levels."....I think "their" should be "his" and "they" should be "he".
  4. Where "[A more detailed explanation here would help readers connect the chart to the point here.]" is written, add this sentence...."Notice that most energy is lost right in the power station where the electricity is generated. Then, there is loss in getting the electricity to the location, to operate the motor, to run the drivetrain, pump and values and finally, the fluid going through the pipes. All those losses should be looked at."

Other than the above, both this article and Part 1 with its changes look great to me.

Thanks,

Ron

RonMcFarland commented 2 years ago

Just noticed, you can ignore the gender-neutral issue here.

On Thu, Sep 1, 2022 at 10:35 AM Ronald McFarland @.***> wrote:

AmyJune,

Here are some change recommendations in this article.

  1. In the sentence, "This is where transparency and collaboration between all plant processes are essential." In think "people in" is required between "between" and "all".
  2. In the sentence, "In this hypothetical case study, the factory energy consultant goes to factories, starting with their previous electricity users. They offer suggestions on how to reduce yearly energy expenses by at least 10-50%."....I think "their" should be "his". Also, "They offer" should be "He offers".....
  3. In the sentence, "First, the factory energy consultant makes an appointment with their most trusted electricity-using manufacturing company and explains that they can help the company save money, with a target of saving 27% of primary energy by 2050 while maintaining current production levels."....I think "their" should be "his" and "they" should be "he".
  4. Where "[A more detailed explanation here would help readers connect the chart to the point here.]" is written, add this sentence...."Notice that most energy is lost right in the power station where the electricity is generated. Then, there is loss in getting the electricity to the location, to operate the motor, to run the drivetrain, pump and values and finally, the fluid going through the pipes. All those losses should be looked at."

Other than the above, both this article and Part 1 with its changes look great to me.

Thanks,

Ron

AmyJuneH commented 2 years ago

Great - i got the edits in.

Thanks for the prompt reviews.

On Wed, Aug 31, 2022 at 6:36 PM Ron McFarland @.***> wrote:

AmyJune,

Here are some change recommendations in this article.

  1. In the sentence, "This is where transparency and collaboration between all plant processes are essential." In think "people in" is required between "between" and "all".
  2. In the sentence, "In this hypothetical case study, the factory energy consultant goes to factories, starting with their previous electricity users. They offer suggestions on how to reduce yearly energy expenses by at least 10-50%."....I think "their" should be "his". Also, "They offer" should be "He offers".....
  3. In the sentence, "First, the factory energy consultant makes an appointment with their most trusted electricity-using manufacturing company and explains that they can help the company save money, with a target of saving 27% of primary energy by 2050 while maintaining current production levels."....I think "their" should be "his" and "they" should be "he".
  4. Where "[A more detailed explanation here would help readers connect the chart to the point here.]" is written, add this sentence...."Notice that most energy is lost right in the power station where the electricity is generated. Then, there is loss in getting the electricity to the location, to operate the motor, to run the drivetrain, pump and values and finally, the fluid going through the pipes. All those losses should be looked at."

Other than the above, both this article and Part 1 with its changes look great to me.

Thanks,

Ron

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semioticrobotic commented 2 years ago

Scheduled to publish September 06, 2022.