New Chapter: Four Stages of Open Leadership

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This is a proposed chapter from DeLisa Alexander.

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Now titled "When open values drive open behaviors: Defining open leadership."

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I will proof this chapter.

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• Page 72, paragraph 3: Based on AP style (our style guide doesn't address), I'd change "t-shirts" to "T-shirts".
• Page 73, paragraph 1: According to AP, "different" is used with "from" not "than" so I'd change the sentence to "Their expectations of managers was very different from what you might find in a traditional, hierarchical company."
• Page 74, paragraph 1: There are a lot of semicolons in this paragraph. It would be nice to break things up and help the reader out. How about replacing the semicolon between "mission" and "poor" with a period and beginning the next sentence with "poor"?
• Page 75, numbered list: The commas at the end of items 1 and 2 are not needed.
• Page 76, paragraph 2: I'd probably set off "in fact" with commas on the second line.
• Page 76, paragraph 3: Insert a comma between "law" and "and".
• Page 77, paragraph 2: Insert a comma between "areas" and "and" at the very end of the paragraph.
• Page 77, paragraph 4: Insert a comma between "function" and "and" in the final line of that page.
• Page 78, paragraph 2: I don't believe the word "when"is needed prior to "to push" or "to let".
• Page 79, line 2: Insert a comma after "way".
• Page 79, first full paragraph: Drop the "s" off of "needs" so it's "need".
• Page 80, third line: I'd likely insert a semicolon after "communities" to better delineate things.
• Page 80, paragraph 2 and 3: AP calls for "companywide" instead of "company-wide".
• Page 80, fourth line from the bottom: I struggled with the part "... to help, but they..." and wonder if it's clearer as "... to help, and that they ...".
• Page 81, first line: Insert a comma after "beliefs".
• Page 81, third line: Insert a comma after "again".
• Page 81, first paragraph: AP calls for "rollout" instead of "roll-out".
• Page 81, paragraph 3: Is there a missing word in the first sentence? Should it read "For me, this project reinforced the fact (or idea) that ..."?
• Page 81, paragraph 3: Insert a comma after "gathering".
• Page 81, second line from the bottom: While AP would capitalize Chris' title, the Red Hat Style Guide would not.I don't know which takes precedence for the book so I'm pointing it out just in case it needs to be changed.
• Page 83, paragraph 1: Is the word "their" missing between "unlock" and "potential" in this sentence, "They know that the ... to unlock potential"?