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Proofread the entire manuscript #27

Closed jhibbets closed 6 years ago

jhibbets commented 6 years ago

Page 15 - 2nd para "Senior" the word senior seems weird here to me. "Senior people aren't the only ones interested in working openly." Reading the first para and going from to that seems like it needs a better transition. Who are senior people? @semioticrobotic

jhibbets commented 6 years ago

Page 17 - missing bio for Jim @semioticrobotic

jhibbets commented 6 years ago

page 23 first full para - does self-reflection need to be hyphenated? @semioticrobotic @samuelknuth

jhibbets commented 6 years ago

page 25 - 4th full para, last sentence The same is true of changing the ways we think. or The same is true of changing the way we think.

way vs ways?? @semioticrobotic @samuelknuth

jhibbets commented 6 years ago

page 29 5th bullet has an extra space between experience and the " experience. " --> experience. " @semioticrobotic

jhibbets commented 6 years ago

page 32 - second full para - I might expand IRI after the 16 footnote to dragonfli. If there are only two occurrences, it might help the reader. Since this was a new term for me, I had to stop and go back up to the see what is was again. @semioticrobotic @jenkelchner

semioticrobotic commented 6 years ago

Got 'em. Thanks. In Jim's piece, "senior people" refers to folks higher up the corporate ladder (your C-Suite, etc.).

jhibbets commented 6 years ago

I have proofed all units and added comments / fixes in the main proofreading issue: https://github.com/open-organization-ambassadors/open-org-workbook/issues/25