Looks ok to me. However there are some stylistic changes
Use October 9 for revision date instead of Sept
Use the tPlace layer for revision info instead of the top layer
Copyright information is all right now on the top layer of the board. Does that meant the diffuser and LEDs, when populated, are going to be, with respect to the board view in Eagle, going into the page?
\ Ultimate goal here is to make sure that the copyright info is not blocked by the diffuser and LED
Are you still using a diffuser? It might be mechanically difficult to mill out those channels you need for the LEDs and mosfets
Final version before ordering rev 1. Smart device connection is aligned properly.