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Section 4.4: We found these sentences in the third paragraph difficult to parse because of the number of noun modifiers.
Current: The size and rate of transport flow control credit updates can affect performance....
Some implementations might have independent transport-layer and application-layer receive buffers...
However, a common flow control implementation technique is to extend credit...
Perhaps (splitting apart the descriptions): The size and rate of updates to flow control credit can affect performance.... .
Some implementations might have independent receive buffers at the transport layer and application layer....
However, a common implementation technique is to extend flow control credit...
Each of the suggested edits in "perhaps" is good, IMO.
Section 4.4: We found these sentences in the third paragraph difficult to parse because of the number of noun modifiers.
Current: The size and rate of transport flow control credit updates can affect performance....
Some implementations might have independent transport-layer and application-layer receive buffers...
However, a common flow control implementation technique is to extend credit...
Perhaps (splitting apart the descriptions): The size and rate of updates to flow control credit can affect performance.... .
Some implementations might have independent receive buffers at the transport layer and application layer....
However, a common implementation technique is to extend flow control credit...