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Word choice "implores" (Section 4.2) #4

Closed mferguson-rpc closed 9 months ago

mferguson-rpc commented 10 months ago

The reader may expect that the person/entity being implored be listed immediately after the verb (implores is a transitive verb). May we update as follows to help the reader?

Original: [Schneider1] implores that proposals to decentralize be "really, really clear about what particular features of a system a given design seeks to decentralize" and promotes borrowing remedies from more traditional governance systems, such as separation of powers and accountability.

Perhaps: [Schneider1] describes that proposals to decentralize should be "really, really clear about what particular features of a system a given design seeks to decentralize" and promotes borrowing remedies from more traditional governance systems, such as separation of powers and accountability.

mnot commented 10 months ago

Perhaps

[Schneider1] implores those who propose decentralization to be "really, really clear about what particular features of a system a given design seeks to decentralize" ...

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