The curriculum section has a range of expressive modes, from something a bit like notes, to comments, to attributing thoughts to particular people. I don't think it works the way it is, but I see two possible approaches:
1.) Situate the document as a sort of bricolage, assemblage, antiquarian, thing and explain the tentative nature of some of the comments and the more-fleshed-out nature of others. (why, anyhow? make up a reason ;- )
The curriculum section has a range of expressive modes, from something a bit like notes, to comments, to attributing thoughts to particular people. I don't think it works the way it is, but I see two possible approaches:
1.) Situate the document as a sort of bricolage, assemblage, antiquarian, thing and explain the tentative nature of some of the comments and the more-fleshed-out nature of others. (why, anyhow? make up a reason ;- )
2.) Rewrite the document for a consistent voice