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Joyce 逐字稿:On the one hand, learn to play a musical instrument develop our own ability in our daily lives. One the other hand, musical instruments makes our life become more and more wonderful. 修改后:I agree that music education is important. I think that learn to play musical instruments can not only enhance our personal abilities in our daily life, but also makes our lives more diverse and colorful.
Meredith: 初版:I think school should have music class. It can help them feel about music’s beauty. Because of school work, student should use music to relax. 修改后:I agree with develop music instrument class in school.First,because of the large number of studies, music can make students’ psychology relax. Also, it can help students to discover their interesting on it.
Sword: 1.I think it is essential for a person's education to learn to play a musical instrument. It can help us relax and it is beneficial to our self-improvement. 2.I think it is essential for a person's education to learn to play a musical instrument. It can give us relief after a whole day's work. leaning to play a musical instrument is a kind of education and it can improve our personal quality.
Tom
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初版 :Because Musical Educations could decrease our poressure of life.And it's the art int our life.We could relax and imporve comprehension of music.And wc can kown the kwnowledge of history of music.
修改后:Musical education can help reduce the pressure of life and add art to our lives. It allows us to relax and improve our comprehension of music. Additionally, it provides knowledge about the history of music
August
I think there is no need to learn to play a musical instrument, because i think if you didn't play the musical instrument, it will spare more time to you to practice your math homework or Chinese homework, so that you can get a rapid development of your grades. At the same time you can pay more attention to yourself, it will not cost you a very long time. So I don't think we should learn to play a musical instrument.
I agree the view which does' believe music education is important. First, you should pay more attention to your grades, if you focus on musical instrument studying, you might couldn't get a satisfying grades. Second, if you choose not to learn to play a musical instrument, the time you spare can be used to do many other things like hanging out with friends. Lastly, don't make yourself so that busy, relax is important. So I think there's no need to learn to play a musical instrument.
Jenny For me I agree that learning an instrument is really important because when I was young, I learned to play the piano. When I gradually grew up, I found that piano is really an important skill because whenever there is a stage you can give a piano performance to the people sit under the stage, and they may know:" oh look she can play the piano so well." So, I will take pride of myself. In my opinion, learn to play a musical instrument well is an important thing. Because when I was young, I learned to play the piano and now I'm learning to play the recorder. I find that there are a lot of time I need to use the instrument. Just like my middle school sometimes there will have the Art Festival so I can join in the art festival and show my abilities. and I think it can increase my confidence.
Eric 初: I think we need music education. Because learn music can give us a nice experience, and I think learning an instrument can be a great hobby. Also we can share our emotions with instrument. 修改后: I think we need music education. We can learn the stories of musicians by taking music lessons. And learn music can give us a nice experience, and I think learning an instrument can be a great hobby. Also we can share our emotions with instrument.
Zao
Andy 原:I agree with play a music instrument is useful, because if someone have a instrument to play, it's can be a hobby, if somebody are nervous, he or she can play instrument to be happy. Also, music instrument is a way to get grade, is useful to get university.
改:I agree that play a musical instrument is useful, because if a person can play a musical instrument, he or she can play it when meet nervous, playing musical instrument can let people be happy. Also, musical instrument is a way to score extra points on exams.
Wesley 原版:I think that play music is a good way to relax everyone. It's very useful and meaningful if we can have music education. It's really useful when we feel down. 修改版:I think that playing music is a good way to relax myself and also for others to enjoy it. So I very like to listen to music. I think music education is important. It's a very useful part of our daliy life. And I can say that listen to music activity. I even trying to play guitar now! It's important, isn't it?
Martin: 1.修改前:I think music education is important, because everyone should has his own skills. And music is a skill.If you can play piano, everyone will admire you.Yes, so music is very important. 2.修改后:We all know that music education is important. Music has a soul, and if we have some musical skills, we can get more attention.So it's important.
Mike 初:I think music education is important because it's a good way to relax ourselves and release pressures. If the world doesn't have any music, our mind may be hurt. Also, if you love music, it's a good dream for you to achieve it. 改:I think music education is essential because it's a good way to relax ourselves and release pressures. If there isn’t any music in the world, our mind may be hurt by the big amount of stress. Also, it can be a good hobby. If you love music, it's a good dream for you to achieve it. It’s cool.
Raymond: Original: I prefer to play. Because I think learn to play music can help make friends. Such as you can play music on your friends' birthday party. It's really useful! Revision: I prefer to play music. Because I think learn to play music can improve yourself and can help you to strengthen your friendship. And it also can give us some good education. Everytimes I play music I will feel really excited and gratifying. Also this can makes it easier for me to express myself at events,like my friends' birthday party.
Luren 1.修改前:I think music education is important, because I think if you learn more music skills can help you have more abilities. And you can have more chances in the future. 2.修改后:I don’t think it’s essential for people to learn it. Because music is not a basic ability for most of people. If someone like music, maybe music is important for him. However, not everybody like music, is their life meaningless? The answer is no, it’s only depend on yourself. So I don’t think is very important.
Richard 前:I think music education is important because different kinds music can influence on people's emotion. Just like rock music can make people become positive. Second, when we learn how to write music, it can improve our creativity. Besides, a music symbol can tell the story about the area.
后:I agree with the view that music education is important. Because listening to good music could improve our taste of the beautiful things in life. And it also influence on our emotions. For example, when we are down then take a sad song may feel better. So it obviously is a good way to deal with our different emotions. Besides, a classic music could tell the local story even a country's culture. So, we can know the world by learning from musics.
Kevin 原:I think it's importent to lrarn to play a musical instrument. First, I think it can improve your knowledge. Second I think playing musical instrument can relaxed yourself. I like playing violin. I think playing violin let me feel really relaxed and I love it very much. 改:Different people have differet ideas. But I prefer that music education is important.I think it's essential because it's a good way to relax ourselves and release pressures. It can also influence our emotions. When you're tired, stressed, nervous or down, a music can make you feel better. Music can also teach us many things. It's really importent.
Karl Chen Original version:Music is a very important subject. It can make students relaxing. When students are studing hard, they need a way to relax themselves. revisionary version:Music is a very important subject, it can be students' useful skill. Some students can play piano, some of them can play clarionet. It's a useful way to relax and playing instruments is healthier than playing computer games.
Name:Tina 原稿:I think learn to play a musical instrument is necessary . Because the music songs is very great and it can help you how to plan time well.vYou can spend a hour or two hours a day to practice piano.And you'll get improved with it. 修改:I think learn to play a musical instrument is necessary. Because the music songs is very peaceful and it can help you how to plan time.It can also help relax yourself.Such as piano, you need to plan your time well. You need to spend at least two hours a day to practice it. you well get improved with it!
I strongly agree that learning a musical instrument is of great importance. It not only helps us cultivate patience in our daily lives but also enhances our mental faculties. Mastering an instrument provides us with an additional avenue and numerous advantages for university admission. In the midst of the mundane, being able to play an instrument adds a fascinating dimension to our lives. Education is a lifelong journey, and the skills acquired through playing an instrument will accompany us forever.
Lauren 1.修改前:I think music education is important, because I think if you learn more music skills can help you have more abilities. And you can have more chances in the future. 2.修改后:I don’t think learning musical instruments it’s essential for people to learn it. Because music instruments is not a basic skills, it only depends on if you want to learn it. For example, someone like music, so they think learning instruments are not a bad thing, even something pretty good, they will think it’s relaxed ; but for someone didn’t interested in music, learning instruments just waste of time, they will feel boring when they have classes. It’s meaningless for them. and school is not just for someone, school should consider everyone in the school. so I think it not necessary to learn instruments.
I think learning to play a musical instrument is important for education. Let's imagine a student starting to learn the piano. Practicing helps them learn to be patient and disciplined. Playing with others in a group helps them work together as a team. These skills are useful for school and their future job. Music also helps them handle stress and express feelings, which makes them feel better. Overall, learning an instrument helps with education and growing as a person.
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