I think what I've added here is a bit clumsy, but on the right track. I need to stop worrying about what I've already written and write more (write the rest of this chapter), so I'm committing this as-is for now. Will refine later.
[ ] There's two "but"s in the paragraph sort of right after each other. Would like to make that flow better.
[ ] Would like this to sound less matter-of-fact, and more frustrated
[ ] In particular, the sensation of anger at her situation vs. sadness of what she feels she has to do
[ ] would like it to come off as more of a rationalization for what she's about to do, rather than a logical reason for it
I think what I've added here is a bit clumsy, but on the right track. I need to stop worrying about what I've already written and write more (write the rest of this chapter), so I'm committing this as-is for now. Will refine later.