On top of the changes I proposed on #7 I have a few other questions. I'm mostly looking for another opinion. It seems I can't see the scans at https://catalog.hathitrust.org/Record/008973972 but maybe it's possible to confirm these there.
XI
Evidently he could not other reply to that question than that life is the greatest evil, ...
"could not other reply" doesn't sound good to me.
Afterword
But not to look was still worse, for I thought of what would happen to me directly I fell from the last support.
It seems something is missing here, but I can't be sure what.
And then, as happens in dreams, I imagined the mechanism by means of which I was held; a very natural intelligible, and sure means, though to one awake that mechanism has no sense.
Same here. Maybe a comma between "natural" and "intelligible"?
On top of the changes I proposed on #7 I have a few other questions. I'm mostly looking for another opinion. It seems I can't see the scans at https://catalog.hathitrust.org/Record/008973972 but maybe it's possible to confirm these there.
XI
"could not other reply" doesn't sound good to me.
Afterword
It seems something is missing here, but I can't be sure what.
Same here. Maybe a comma between "natural" and "intelligible"?