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White Paper on the EPUBWEB project
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Closed jeankaplansky closed 9 years ago

jeankaplansky commented 9 years ago

"While Web documents and portable documents have distinguishing characteristics, the differences can also be viewed as situational and gradual rather than representing bright-line distinctions."

How about "The differences between the distinguishing characteristics of web documents and portable document can be viewed as situational and gradual rather than as representative of bright-line distinctions."

(Someone beat me over the head with a red marker about passive voice one. Not really. But they did instill the point about avoid the passive...)

iherman commented 9 years ago

No doubt this sounds better! Done.