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[ED-MED] [Diverse Abilities and Barriers] [first page] summary needs editing #298

Closed shawna-slh closed 10 months ago

shawna-slh commented 10 months ago

Diverse Abilities and Barriers:

Summary This page explores the wide diversity of people and abilities. It highlights some web accessibility barriers that people commonly experience because of inaccessible websites and web tools.

  1. That summary worked when all of the information was on one page. It needs editing now that the information is across multiple pages.

Maybe just replace "This page" with "This section" like in Tools & Techniques page?

  1. downplay web current "... some web accessibility barriers..." -> "... some accessibility barriers..."

  2. fewer modifiers

    It highlights some web accessibility barriers that people commonly experience

-> It highlights some accessibility barriers that people experience

or maybe even

-> It highlights accessibility barriers that people experience

-- not sure how important to show that it's not-inclusive -- probably not needed in this sentence since it's in the next. Also, the headings are all "Examples of..."

  1. highlights?

-> It describes accessibility barriers that people experience

or

-> It introduces accessibility barriers that people experience

?

JayneSchurick commented 10 months ago

Does my new suggested phrasing take care of these comments?