I've read through your proposal and found your project interesting, Here are some general comments and guidelines that you might find helpful.
The project is about identifying infected patients from the symptoms they showed. This group is using the data set from an opt-in, off-platform survey about covid-19 like symptoms that includes global data and US data starting ranging from the different time periods. I think the proposal is being divided into three parts so it's very clear to look at and know about the logic flow of the document, the proposal also covers all the points that are necessary to mention including the background of why doing this, the brief description of the data set as well as a reasoning of how the group can deal with those data. I think in terms of improvement, the first thing i noticed is that this isn't in a format of a memo, maybe start with Dear manager, or a greeting since the manager is the one who's supposed to read the proposal and decide if approve or not. I think you can also include what types of data you have, not only by pointing out the names of the features. You might also include if your focus is more on us or if you want to compare us to the rest of the world.
Dear Valued Employees,
Hope all is well,
I've read through your proposal and found your project interesting, Here are some general comments and guidelines that you might find helpful.
The project is about identifying infected patients from the symptoms they showed. This group is using the data set from an opt-in, off-platform survey about covid-19 like symptoms that includes global data and US data starting ranging from the different time periods. I think the proposal is being divided into three parts so it's very clear to look at and know about the logic flow of the document, the proposal also covers all the points that are necessary to mention including the background of why doing this, the brief description of the data set as well as a reasoning of how the group can deal with those data. I think in terms of improvement, the first thing i noticed is that this isn't in a format of a memo, maybe start with Dear manager, or a greeting since the manager is the one who's supposed to read the proposal and decide if approve or not. I think you can also include what types of data you have, not only by pointing out the names of the features. You might also include if your focus is more on us or if you want to compare us to the rest of the world.
Best, Manager