Tenshitsuki: subtitles feedback

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Ep. 03

~ 04:46
你在在意这个吗 不是啊 总不能一直睡一张床吧
你在在意這個嗎 不是啊 總不能一直睡一張床吧

It looks like there is an extra 在.

When I first saw it, I was not too sure. After searching and listening to it several times, I think this is a typo. If I am wrong, please point it out.

Ep. 05

~ 04:00
德光给我买的交通卡 我会当做传家宝的
德光給我買的交通卡 我會當做傳家寶的

Judging from the search results on the Internet, although 当作/當作 and 当做/當做 have almost the same meaning and are both used, the former is more likely to be used (especially by many publishing houses). I personally recommend changing the word to the former.

Ep. 06

~ 08:47
当初我一个人来到人间时候 虽然很兴奋
當初我一個人來到人間時候 雖然很興奮

人间时候/人間時候 -> 人间时/人間時 or 人间的时候/人間的時候 maybe better?

Ep. 07

~ 19:30
“おはよう”

“” -> 「」 maybe better?

Others

The placement of some comments seems inconsistent. I took screenshots of all the reviews for the first seven episodes.

Preview

_The fourth screenshot is taken from the LoliHouse releases, the rest are taken from the JPSC releases._      

Sources

Preview

_Unbatch releases._ _It looks like there are minor differences between some of the JPSC releases and LoliHouse’s releases, so the references have been added._ ``` [Nekomoe kissaten][One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki][01][1080p][JPSC].mp4 [Nekomoe kissaten][One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki][01][1080p][JPTC].mp4 [Nekomoe kissaten][One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki][02][1080p][JPSC].mp4 [Nekomoe kissaten][One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki][02][1080p][JPTC].mp4 [Nekomoe kissaten][One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki][03][1080p][JPSC].mp4 [Nekomoe kissaten][One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki][03][1080p][JPTC].mp4 [Nekomoe kissaten][One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki][04][1080p][JPSC].mp4 [Nekomoe kissaten][One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki][04][1080p][JPTC].mp4 [Nekomoe kissaten][One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki][05][1080p][JPSC].mp4 [Nekomoe kissaten][One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki][05][1080p][JPTC].mp4 [Nekomoe kissaten][One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki][06][1080p][JPSC].mp4 [Nekomoe kissaten][One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki][06][1080p][JPTC].mp4 [Nekomoe kissaten][One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki][07][1080p][JPSC].mp4 [Nekomoe kissaten][One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki][07][1080p][JPTC].mp4 ``` ``` [Nekomoe kissaten&LoliHouse] One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki - 01 [WebRip 1080p HEVC-10bit AAC ASSx2].mkv [Nekomoe kissaten&LoliHouse] One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki - 02 [WebRip 1080p HEVC-10bit AAC ASSx2].mkv [Nekomoe kissaten&LoliHouse] One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki - 03 [WebRip 1080p HEVC-10bit AAC ASSx2].mkv [Nekomoe kissaten&LoliHouse] One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki - 04 [WebRip 1080p HEVC-10bit AAC ASSx2].mkv [Nekomoe kissaten&LoliHouse] One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki - 05 [WebRip 1080p HEVC-10bit AAC ASSx2].mkv [Nekomoe kissaten&LoliHouse] One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki - 06 [WebRip 1080p HEVC-10bit AAC ASSx2].mkv [Nekomoe kissaten&LoliHouse] One Room, Hiatari Futsuu, Tenshi-tsuki - 07 [WebRip 1080p HEVC-10bit AAC ASSx2].mkv ```

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Edit: Sync description to episode 07.

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I am a bit curious as to what the proofreaders think of the feedback on the translations in my descriptions, because I have not seen any reaction yet lol.

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EP06 Dialogue: 5,0:08:36.80,0:08:39.33,Text_JP,,0,0,0,,私を　𠮟ってくれました

”𠮟“ 应该写成 “叱” (这两个字的编码不一样。后者才是日字，才不会缺字) “\ud842\udf9f”　→　“\u53f1”