anaseto / boohu

Break Out Of Hareka's Underground, a roguelike game.
https://codeberg.org/anaseto/boohu
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rephrased story text #14

Closed erf closed 6 years ago

erf commented 6 years ago

I took the liberty to simplify and rephrase the story text somewhat. Totally fine if you don't want this change as it is very subjective. Also made it italic. ( btw i'd prefer medicinal fungi )

anaseto commented 6 years ago

Yeah, the description could do with some improvement, I'll probably take some ideas from this (I particularly like the “elders” word, and the italic idea).

Though, actually, “simella plants” are a plant that exists in the world of Hareka, for which several (non-english) books exist, some of them open-source, so it has more flavour than fungi :) And Hareka is mostly a world of normal people, sometimes adventurous, but no much heros ;)

By the way, the mention of the magical stairs is because, supposedly, your village knows about them — but maybe this should be written explicitly there. In fact the in-game description of the magical stairs in the last level says now that they lead you back to your village, and that the magical stairs were made by Marevor, which is an eccentric character of Hareka with deep knowledge about teleportation and that is sometimes lurking around in the Underground :)

anaseto commented 6 years ago

So I did various improvements based on your patch, keeping the magical stairs and without “hero” :)

erf commented 6 years ago

I was not familiar with the lore of Hareka and was a bit unsure about ‘hero’ and ‘stairs’ but the new text looks good!